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My lips are red for you by ~ShiningMoon:iconShiningMoon:



My lips are red for you;
Imbued with blood you made to rush,
And muscles bid to tense,
Not without offense to them—
someone,
(—always someone—),
But then, you knew it;
You drew it up that way,
Blood-imbuer, trouble-stewer,
Trip before you run.

My legs tremble for you,
Under the pressure you twisted in,
And twitching heartbeat-lust,
Brushing against them—
whoever,
(—the same whoever who did us in—)
But of course, it’s fine;
Your design, it worked its course,
Pressure-twister, descriptor-lister,
Look back if you fall.

My breath parts throat for you;
Demands for words draw words forth,
Forgoing pleasantries and consequences,
Winces and shock from them—
anyone,
(—anyone;
they’ve
not heard such blasphemy)
But then, not anyone’s there;
Ergo, we dared the fall,
Word-demander: fucking candor:
Don’t forget it all.
©2007-2009 ~ShiningMoon
:iconshiningmoon:

Author's Comments

As I am currently unable to come up with a title, I did it the lazy way and just used the first line.

Wrote this a while ago because the first line kept popping into my head. I had written (in my head) a different version of it, but by the time I got to sitting down and writing it, I'd forgotten what my idea was, and went in an entirely different direction.

The narratee's (XD) personality is based on my boyfriend, but the situation or general state of things described isn't necessarily applicable. I'm sure I could think of a way, though...

I tried to build in a few different meanings, so it's meant to be read through multiple times.

Critique, please. X3

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:iconvegeta-always-wins:
i would critique you, but nothing i say would be anywhere as good as you write

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If at first you don't succeed, destroy all evidence that you tried.
:iconchuquita:
Very well written. :3

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:damphyr: :bulletorange: :bulletpink: Goku: Hwoo! I...I feel so light...it's like I'm not even here! Ha haah! Hoo Hoo hoo! I'm a feather!!! A strong feather! I bet I could handle kaio-ken x10!:bulletpink: :bulletorange: :damphyr:
:iconshiningmoon:
Well, if you have something to critique, critique it! If you have a question or anything, even. :)
Nonetheless, I'm flattered. ^^

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